tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post5675346097719204170..comments2010-03-17T21:33:46.500-05:00Denise Grover Swankhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08089120954470675439noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-36950891891791060022010-03-17T21:33:46.494-05:002010-03-17T21:33:46.494-05:00Great Job! I agree the Percy Jackson comment was fantastic! You captured Lexi&#39;s visions and emotions very well. Would love to know what you think of mine: http://www.melissaddean.com/2010/03/pg-love-scene-blogfest-entry.htmlMelissa Deanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10677077308421607728noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-78639226795834149572010-03-16T01:00:15.279-05:002010-03-16T01:00:15.279-05:00I think this is one of my favorites! So gross and delicious. Excellent voice. Poor girl though, I doubt she wants to marry him now. lol<br /><br />.........dholeDonna Holehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-61835429073257144522010-03-15T23:56:39.396-05:002010-03-15T23:56:39.396-05:00That was sooooo vividly sex without all the extra stuff like... you know... feelings... understanding... angst. I loved all the little weird bits that made it just awkward instead of hot. LOL. Very nicely written. I don&#39;t think I&#39;d ever let a Mid-grader read it... because there would be &quot;questions&quot; that would come with it... but I think you fit the bill.Wendy Sparrowhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06240583852940769313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-32188425447463694352010-03-15T21:48:46.094-05:002010-03-15T21:48:46.094-05:00Oh she must be so traumatized! This was great, the poor kid.Hayleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16786674202167099600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-467046871837394332010-03-15T20:27:26.211-05:002010-03-15T20:27:26.211-05:00Exercise is exercise...until she realizes it isn&#39;t. HA! And I laughed at the line about only working on the project from 4:30 to 5pm. I loved this. Great job.Melanie Shermanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01385073936714563295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-47450101742245707142010-03-15T18:49:23.850-05:002010-03-15T18:49:23.850-05:00I did something similar...as did a lot of people, it looks like! I like that she compared it to gym class, by the way. :) Good job!Just Another Sarahhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07589166715361819941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-50467604638851458792010-03-15T16:03:43.063-05:002010-03-15T16:03:43.063-05:00I laughed out loud a million times! That was wonderful!!! The cat.. oh man... you did a wonderful job!Angie Katehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15448261306497185374noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-79971061901700831262010-03-15T15:52:05.245-05:002010-03-15T15:52:05.245-05:00Hee! This had me laughing. It&#39;s a great look at the challenge. :)sarahjayne smythehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02589820347348973092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-36345605659484272792010-03-15T15:47:49.761-05:002010-03-15T15:47:49.761-05:00&quot;Aristotle wasn’t even in Percy Jackson and the Lightning Thief movie. Almost all the Greek gods were, so he must have been a pretty minor player. But Mr. Simpson wouldn’t listen to reason and insisted we do the project anyway. Whatever.&quot;<br /><br />That was HILARIOUS! I loved it (although it was funny for me to read since my daughter&#39;s name is Lexi...)<br /><br />Oh, to pine away after an older guy while in Middle school (that brings back memories!)<br /><br />Excellent job! You captured her thoughts perfectly!Kristenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13726586763569629811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-25039470162354233112010-03-15T15:02:10.139-05:002010-03-15T15:02:10.139-05:00Great great voice. I love her!!! She&#39;s so 8th grade!! Great job.Piedmont Writerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-60221398452653033712010-03-15T14:06:15.655-05:002010-03-15T14:06:15.655-05:00This had such a great voice and def felt MG!Frankie Diane Mallishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06066659801542129040noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-86903848243443652542010-03-15T12:55:15.903-05:002010-03-15T12:55:15.903-05:00Denise, this is one of my favorites! You totally captured such a FUN voice to read! My favorite lines were absolutely: &quot;Aristotle wasn’t even in Percy Jackson and the Lightning Thief movie&quot; and &quot;Zach grunted as the girl made weird sounds, kind of like my cat after the time it ate a bunch of cheese.&quot; OMG I was dying with laughter right after reading it.Sara McClung ♥http://www.blogger.com/profile/09824996048264979275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-12215133506485330072010-03-15T12:25:10.991-05:002010-03-15T12:25:10.991-05:00How is it you ALWAYS make me laugh?! Loved this! Her reaction is perfect, the description of &quot;the act&quot; is perfect. Awesome job, hon.ThePreyershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08906580310155422359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-57536495685203563422010-03-15T12:19:27.679-05:002010-03-15T12:19:27.679-05:00Denise - LOVED IT. I love Lexi&#39;s voice and I know how much fun you had writing this. It shows. Julia was right to tell you to keep the beginning portion. The build was essential. You have the gift of humor in your writing. WELL DONE!LK Gardner-Griffiehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05520319424741799928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-37703538828437432072010-03-15T11:44:33.847-05:002010-03-15T11:44:33.847-05:00You, good lady, appear to have the young girl voice down pat. And you&#39;ve probably done the right thing by having the scene be one of other-discovery, not self-discovery. Well done!<br /><br />Also, please don&#39;t have your daughter read mine. Thanks in advance. :)<br /><br />Thanks for playing along!Simon C. Larterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01628662209746701945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-17459063120603493472010-03-15T11:43:59.947-05:002010-03-15T11:43:59.947-05:00Very well done--and hooray for using the same loop hole I did! (Though you pushed yourself a lot harder to clarify what was going on. Props for that!) And OMG-the Percy Jackson line was PRICELESS! ;)Shannon Messengerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08003607156860716462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-22447717601475422392010-03-15T11:37:39.968-05:002010-03-15T11:37:39.968-05:00Honestly I laughed out loud throughout this one! Great story. Love the Percy Jackson line. ;o)the panting and the comparison to the cat... hilarious! <br /><br />Wonderful job!<br /><br /><a href="http://princesscourtneysbarr.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Visit My Kingdom Anytime</a><br /><br />word verification: ickhammm... yeah appropriate for sure! ;o)Southern Princesshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14455508477182984039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-3342022149917674592010-03-15T09:52:16.754-05:002010-03-15T09:52:16.754-05:00Haha, well done! I knew what was coming, but only because I knew what the prompt was ;) I love her confusion at first and the sudden dawning of <i>Oh...</i>maybe geniushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17034419617457525778noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-59703751797054757782010-03-15T09:31:43.365-05:002010-03-15T09:31:43.365-05:00Great capturing of a middle school mindset. I especially loved the graff about Aristotle. I totally have to show my philosophy professor hubby--he will be rolling for sure!laurelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03657218435228802535noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-38724912781009114502010-03-15T09:15:13.783-05:002010-03-15T09:15:13.783-05:00I couldn&#39;t help but laugh. &quot;I knew he was tired because he panted a lot.&quot; LOL! And the part about her cat w/ the cheese...I&#39;m strange, I know.Brandyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16775110752834313420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-69102304715553257182010-03-15T09:08:15.506-05:002010-03-15T09:08:15.506-05:00Nice. Very realistic, and I can definitely see why she was traumatized.Liviahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15805379309049803903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-84858270778785803282010-03-15T09:02:54.670-05:002010-03-15T09:02:54.670-05:00Thanks Krisi! I partially wrote this for Julia. She has been begging me to write something she could read. This was test to see if I wanted to jump in the MG or YA waters. And yes, it IS gross-- don&#39;t want my 12 year old thinking otherwise! LOLDenisehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08089120954470675439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7167227758379597062.post-87741191018128184982010-03-15T08:51:30.071-05:002010-03-15T08:51:30.071-05:00Nice job! I love the character&#39;s voice and perspective, though, I&#39;m not sure it&#39;s a love scene...more like a gross-out scene. LOLKristie Cookhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01649966564896771373noreply@blogger.com